With fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the
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modern
era, fast-
food
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restaurants are ubiquitous as they are indispensable for busy
people
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. Regarding
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, there are pros and cons to
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fast
food
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.
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, I strongly believe that the drawback of eating fast
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overwhelm the benefit. On the one hand, fast
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is efficient. Since a significant number of
people
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suffer from hectic
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schedule
in contemporary society, cooking by themselves is
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. They do not have enough time to go to a market, bring ingredients, and wash dishes.
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, many
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eat fast
food
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which
people
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can quickly eat.
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, fast
food
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is economical as the price is lower than other meals.
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, a survey conducted by
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Cambodia
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university has revealed that almost 20% of citizens rely on fast
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as they cannot afford proper meals.
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, it is
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reasonable
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to point out that consuming fast
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is fast and economical.
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, fast
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is harmful to health because chemicals
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as MSG, preserves which make better tastes and help them save a long time are used in order to
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more and more.
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, a lot of sugar and salt are
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used to make
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savory
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fast
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. In terms of
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, not only can
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consumption of high
sugarly
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sugary
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on a regular basis causes obesity, but it may
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contribute to other major health issues
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as diabetes and high blood pressure.
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, recent media in Korea reports that the conditions of almost 30% of kids who have
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and allergies and eat fast
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regularly become worse due to respiratory symptoms. As the example
clearlly
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clearly
illustrates, fast
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is reasonable
to
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be called junk
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. In conclusion, while I accept that fast
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can sometimes be rather efficient, there is no doubt to point out that
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demerit of it is more serious than
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merit.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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