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in many countries schoolhave severe problems with students behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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We cannot disagree that the future completely depends on present youngsters. Unfortunately, several institutions in the world often face serious conflicts from a trait of students. There is a great number of reasons that are answerable to problems. In
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discipline
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 from their family and the soft rule of a school.
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, a less strict family might assign uncontrollable children to be the worst obstacle for instructors to handle.
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, offspring who do not have primary education adequately tend to have aggressive behaviour when they are compelled to properly obey the restriction that these pupils have never done before.
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, teaching quality and quantity from parents
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considerable
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 to be the
first
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 step of children's proper expression. It seems reasonable that schools can face severe issues due to
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careless
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 of
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family
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.
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, the soft rule of a school would lack sufficient control over its pupils.
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,
student
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dare
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who dare
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resisting
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 a punishment,
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 as, only one hitting by a ruler on them or breaking
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for one day from a class
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 not provide
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 guilty response within their mind. The inefficient rule is not capable to deal with an offensive
characteristic
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 of youngsters.
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, educators will continuously implement
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these problems as usual. In conclusion, a
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 sides of reasons should be considered as the major roots of problems. In fact, children are influenced
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 an essential environment around them
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 is acceptable
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 involves an education from home and academy.
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, both institutions must earlier take care of kids before it is too late.
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