Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive pension at an early age. Do you agree or disagree?
Generally speaking,
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retirement
retrirement
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the retrirement
age
is 65 years old in Use synonyms
this
day and Linking Words
age
. Regarding Use synonyms
this
, some Linking Words
people
assert that it is not fair to set the same Use synonyms
age
for retirement as some jobs are more dangerous than others. I strongly believe that some specific employees who work in certain dangerous industries should retire earlier and be Use synonyms
recieved
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received
pension
earlier than Correct article usage
a pension
other
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in other
occupation
.
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occupations
Firstly
, it is generally acknowledged that hospitals Linking Words
has
a harmful atmosphere since there are a lot of viruses and bacteria. When Change the verb form
have
people
get Use synonyms
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the order
an order
order
, their body is increasingly weak, thereby leading to Correct your spelling
older
weak
immune system. Correct article usage
a weak
Therefore
, old workers who work at a hospital have more chances to get illnesses Linking Words
such
as AIDs and tuberculosis. Linking Words
Moreover
, because healthcare workers have to move patients' bodies in order to prevent Linking Words
bed sores
, aged Correct your spelling
bedsores
worker
tend to easily get hurt. Fix the agreement mistake
workers
For example
, recent media in Korea has revealed that almost 30% of healthcare individuals have pain Linking Words
on
their back and wrist as they have to deal with heavy patients. As the example clearly Change preposition
in
illustates
, healthcare workers Correct your spelling
illustrates
such
as nurses and Linking Words
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caregivers
care givers
should retire at an early Correct your spelling
caregivers
age
not to be hurt.
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Next
, some certain Linking Words
occupation
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occupations
such
as police officers, the army, and security guards which protect citizens need physical Linking Words
strenghth
because they sometimes have to stop violent criminals. After Correct your spelling
strength
people
become older, their Use synonyms
muscle
and power are reduced. Fix the agreement mistake
muscles
Hence
, not only can they not be able to protect others, but they may Linking Words
also
fail to save themselves. Linking Words
For instance
, a survey conducted by the Korea Labor Foundation has Linking Words
revelaed
that the majority of employers are afraid to hire old guards since their Correct your spelling
revealed
body
are not reliable to protect inhabitants. Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
Hence
, it is reasonable to point out that Linking Words
armforce
should take a rest earlier than other jobs for safety.
In conclusion, some Correct your spelling
arm force
are force
people
who work in a harmful environment and protect others should retire earlier than other jobs as their bodies are not perfect Use synonyms
to
coping with Change preposition
for
such
Linking Words
environment
.Correct article usage
an environment
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