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You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.

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Dear
sir
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 or Madam, I am writing to express my interest
to work
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in working
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at the head office in Ottawa,
that
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 can enhance my knowledge and gain some foreign job experience. The opportunity helps to contribute my essential abilities
for
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 my home country branch in future. To be precise, there are several reasons beyond the request which will help to expand our business overseas successfully .I have been working here since 2018 and learned many professional and personal skills for the development of my personality. I want to try my management skills to
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with a diverse workforce.
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 abilities will help me to manage my father’s office in my home country.
i
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 will keep an eye on the emails and provide support for any urgent calls if needed. In my absence ,my assistant Monika will do my office work .I taught her all the required skills for the industry . I am eagerly waiting for your positive response to the request. Yours faithfully, Sukhwinder
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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