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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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There exists an opinion that it will be available to ensure
commute
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 of any type of motorcycles in the
further
, without its drivers. I firmly believe that
benefits
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 of
this
 development are over its drawbacks.
This
 development will give
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to decrease the level of car crashes. In essence, in
everyday
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an everyday
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 routine it happens
difference
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kind
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 of car accidents,
as a result
 of human factors in diverse circumstances,
such
 as using alcohol, being
non-skilled
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the non-skilled
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 driver and driving too fast, to name but a few, which can have even fatal consequences.
Thus
, excluding human beings from
driving
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 process of vehicles, can lead to
low
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 risk of its crashes, provided it
based
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 on
well-developed
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a well-developed
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 automated system, which is more
safety
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 and reliable.
According to
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Elon Musk, who has worked on driverless engines
the
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for the
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last
 10 years,
recent
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 investigated that
such
trend
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 will reduce accidental rates
of
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USA
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the USA
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for
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 25% annually, which is gigantic. On the other side,
this
 invention will lead to
increasing
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 rates of unemployment. In general, a huge part of
population
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the population
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earn
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for
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butter and bread, due to their driving ability in different field of job,
such
 as taxi or bus driver and delivering commodities to their customers, which is widespread in
whole
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 world, regardless its financial and economic conditions. So,
this
 can bring
high
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 level of unemployed people, as they will not have any demand, though
this
 problem can be tackled by receiving
alternative
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an alternative
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 job
offer
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. In Egypt,
for instance
,
majority
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the majority
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 of Egyptians started to
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 tourists by their camels, as a measure
for
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 transportation,
as a result
 of which taxi drivers received
job
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 at hotels. To recapitulate, it is possible to invent vehicles, which will be exploited without drivers in the near future.
This
 can
works
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wonder
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 the huge quantity of fatal accidents, while people can complain about reducing their income.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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