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Many people are afraid to leave their home because of crime. Some believe that more actions should be taken to prevent crime. While others feel that little action can be done to stop crime. What is your opinion?

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The illustration reveals data related to peoples'
coffee
 and tea purchase and
consumption
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 preferences for the
last
 4 weeks in 5 different cities in Australia. At the
first
 glance, it is clear that the vast majority of the citizens in each city, with the exception of
Adelaide
, chose to go to a cafe to drink
coffee
 or tea. In the 4 weeks, instant
coffee
 is most frequently consumed in Hobert with just under 55
percent
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 of residents. The proportion of Brisbane is just a few
percent
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 lower than Hobert with roughly 53.
Adelaide
 is in 3rd place and
this
 is followed by
Melbourne
 and Sydney with 48 and 46
percent
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 of their citizens, respectively. Fresh
coffee
,
on the other hand
, is utilized in Sydney and
Melbourne
 the most with around 43
percent
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 for each. Hobert followed the two leaders with 38
percent
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 while Brisbane and
Adelaide
 shared equal proportions at the bottom of the list with 35
percent
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 of their population. The final subject of comparison is cafes.
Melbourne
's residents are leading on
this
 preference with about 64
percent
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 whereas
Adelaide
 has the least proportion with just under 50
percent
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.
Melbourne
 is followed by Hobart, Sydney, and Brisbane with 62, 61, and 55
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, respectively.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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