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The government’s investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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These days, the power spends a large part of its budget not only on the public outset but
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 I agree that it is important to spend pay on public graduation, I do not think spending on the
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 is a waste of salary. There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of the authority budget on public initiation.
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 and foremost, public kickoff is the things
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 as hospitals, roads and schools, and these things determine the quality of life that most of us will have.
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, if the government does not spend enough capital on hospitals, the health of our society may decline.
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, if not enough property is spent on schools, our children may not be properly educated.
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, it will be the poor in our society that will be affected more if we do not spend enough on these things because they are the ones more dependent on
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 does not mean that the
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 should be completely neglected.
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, it is difficult for many
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 institutions to generate much profit, so without some help from the law, many theatres and other
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 places may have to close.
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, the
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 have an important impact on our quality of life. Many people get great pleasure in going to see music and theatre performances so it is important that the union assists
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 institutions so that they can continue to provide entertainment to the public. To sum up, there are clear benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment goes into public graduation as
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 influences the quality of life for nearly all of us. That said, I do not believe spending salary on the
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 too provides important benefits.
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