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Shopping is the favourite free time activity for many young people today. Why do you think this has happened? Should young people be encouraged to do different activities in their free time rather than shopping?

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Young
people
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 have a lot of free
time
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 and what they do with it is important. Shopping is considered a common free
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activity
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 among young
people
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.
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, many
people
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 believe that the youth should engage in other activities, and I completely agree with
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss why shopping has become
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 a famous
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 among youngsters, and why the youth must get involved in other useful activities in their free
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. Shopping has changed a lot since the start of the 21st century. To illustrate, shopping is not just about getting groceries for the house but about having fun and spending
time
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 with
friends
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 and family - thanks to places like luxurious malls.
People
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 can have lunch, watch movies, and buy what they need all in the same place.
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, they have become great places to meet
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friends
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, the act of shopping itself is very fun because of all the choices and the constant moving between different stores.
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, shopping is not the most rewarding or beneficial
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 for young
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.
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 shopping can be a good
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 killer and is extremely fun with
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, it does nothing to help nurture the talents and passions of children and teens. It is an
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that is
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 only good for instant gratification. Young
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 should realize the importance of the
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 that they have, and what they can do with it. They ought to do more meaningful activities which can improve their personal growth like reading, exercising, and practising their hobbies. After all, they have so many opportunities, and if they use them well, they can change the world for the better. To conclude, shopping is a good way for young
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 to spend
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 with
friends
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 and family, but other better alternatives can boost their personal growth and provide them with many opportunities in the future.
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