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Band 7.5

Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific arguments presented in the reading passage.

Both lecture and the reading are discussing the cause of the
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 of sea otters. The former is of the opinion that causes of predation
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. While the latter provides three points to support his belief about sea otter extinction.
To begin
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 with, the
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 issue we encounter is associated with pollution theory. The speaker highlights
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 theory is not convincing due to the fact that pollution theory is leakage by no one can find it.
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, he demonstrates his point by saying that if infection kills otter, the fact consistence predator is a hypothesis.
On the other hand
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, the text posits that the experiment from water in that area showed that increased levels of chemicals could decrease the otters' resistance to death.
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, another topic of the debate revolves around other mammals hunting whales. Once again the professor points out that whale disappears because of humans hunter.
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, he illustrates his point by mentioning that they had to change their diet to survive.
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, he provides that orca is available.
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, the article confirms that whatever had endangered the otters was affecting other sea mammals as well. To wrap things up, the final point in the discussion is connected to the uneven pattern of otter
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. The instructor suggests that it depends on the location where they live. What's more, he explains that those location access
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 because large cannot access the shallow rocky location.
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, the passage states that ocean currents or other environmental factors may have created uneven concentrations of pollutants along the coast.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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