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Shopping is the favourite free time activity for many young people today. Why do you think this has happened? Shopping is the favourite free time activity for many young people today. Why do you think this has happened? Should young people be encouraged to do different activities in their free time rather than shopping??

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It can see that nowadays many young
people
 choose to go for shopping to kill their free
time
 rather than doing other
activities
. shopping is the most favourite activity for the younger generation
instead
 of doing other
activities
. in
this
 essay, I will give my answer to the questions in
this
 essay briefly. mainly, the public is more interested to go shopping malls and access with shopping sites they are spending a lot of
time
 searching and choosing the items.
moreover
, they are influenced by branded items and advertisements of big celebrities of the products.
in addition
 ,shopping malls and shopping websites are putting so many offers on the products and it can easily attract the public to buy the products.
however
, in ,malls they are attracted by some other cafes, and mini restaurants
also
.
for instance
, Amazon is giving so many offers on weekends and festivals to attract
people
 who are spending a lot of
time
 exploring fashion.
secondly
,nowadays more young
people
 are interested to spend their leisure
time
 shopping.
instead
 of they can do more
activities
 by wasting
time
 shopping.
however
,they can use their free
time
 in some
activities
 playing sports like tennis,cricket and indoor games.it will give more knowledge and
moreover
,they can learn dance and singing
also
instead
 of wasting
time
 shopping.
for example
,most working and young
people
 are interested to learn some
activities
 like Zumba,playing sports. it will give stress out and physically fit. In conclusion, most of the citizens spend their leisure
time
 shopping and accessing shopping sites like Amazon, and Flipkart
instead
 of doing other
activities
.
people
 can replace them with other
activities
 it will be helpful for them.
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