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some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. other believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be usefull in the future, such as those relates to science and technology. discuss both views and give your own poinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #usefull #future #science #technology #poinion
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Selection of the
programme
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 that the person is going to enrol
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 the
university
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 is one of the most important decisions and has a great influence
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on
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future
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. Some people believe that students should study what they are interested in, while
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others
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 think they should choose a
programme
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will
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that will
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 help them in their
future
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both arguments On the one hand,
university
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 students should be allowed to choose their preferred
programme
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 freely without any kind of pressure either from parents or anyone else.
Student’s
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A student’s
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 desire for a particular subject at the
university
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 plays an essential role in improving his academic achievement. That explains why the students who love and enjoy their studying usually get better results
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 exams.
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, nowadays, many pedagogical experts are encouraging parents to let their children make their
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won
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own
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 choices when it comes to
selection
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the selection
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 of
university
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programme
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programmes
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 believing that it will impact positively on their
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carer
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carers
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.
On the other hand
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, there is no doubt that the world has changed
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 the past because of
the
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apply
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technological progression, and in order to keep up
these
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with these
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 changes, it’s necessary to choose a
university
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programme
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 that can fulfil the advanced needs of
present
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 time and the coming
future
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.
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, studying IT (information technology) is very trendy nowadays, and it can be considered
as
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one of the most successful
university
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 programmes
especially
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 after the
wide spread
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widespread
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 of modern technological innovations. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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 giving the chance for the children to choose the subject they want can be more productive.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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