Scientists recommend making it mandatory for children to learn how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Music is generally known to have an indispensable role in the

development

of

children

. For

this

reason, some educational experts believe that learning to play musical

instrumens

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instruments

instrument

should be compulsory for them. Yet

this

belief has win-win benefits for

children

, the main reasons why I disagree with that

,

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will be provided in

this

essay.

To begin

with, nobody can deny that playing musical

instruments

has numerous advantages for the

development

of

children

. To be more clearly, learning how to play musical

instruments

, intensifies

the

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brain

development

, especially, in the areas which are responsible not only for acquiring language, listening, reading and motor skills but

also

for creativity and imagination. Banging on drums,

for instance

, is scientifically proved to boost physical

development

.

Hence

, it is highly advisable to learn musical

instruments

due to the aforementioned benefits which it generates.

Conversely

, not every child has an inborn talent for learning certain

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of musical

instruments

.

This

means that it is quite arduous for him or her to gain these skills even though many efforts are done. Some

children

,

furthermore

, may hardly be eager to pursue music despite the fact that they are talented but

instead

they have a high interest in other subjects

such

as Science or Math. In

these

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both cases, forcing them to learn how to play

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piano, a flute or a saxophone might potentially lead to devastating consequences including losing self-esteem, feeling aimless or even attempting

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. Forcing

children

to learn musical

instruments

,

therefore

, has a detrimental impact on

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mental

development

of

children

. In conclusion, having considered all, I reiterate that freedom for choosing whether to learn to play musical

instruments

or not

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should be given to

children

, even if it is extremely both psychologically and physically beneficial for

children

's

development

.