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University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays many people are arguing that tertiary
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 should be free and accessible to all citizens. In
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 I will be discussing why I totally agree with
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 is a basic human right and it should be available to all
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 their financial status. For ,example FINLAND is considered one of the best countries in the world because many of the country's universities are found by the government.
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 is free.
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, free
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education
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 is actually beneficially for both
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 and society.To elaborate, when the number of educated people increases it will help countries prosper. ,
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 there will be a decline in poverty and unemployment
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 which will lead to a decrease in the criminal activity
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. A recent study that was conducted in THE UK showed that there is a positive correlation between the increased crime
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 and unemployment.
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, it will give a sense of equality. the major issue with
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 in
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 day and age is affordability. a lot of bright-minded
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 steams from low-income households.
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 making
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 free will give these
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 an opportunity to
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 and the economy of their country to grow. In conclusion, when governments offer free
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education
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 it will help boost the country's economy. promote equality and decrease the crime
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. for these reasons I completely agree with the idea that
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education
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 should be free.
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