Restoration of old buildings in main cities involves enormous government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to spend this money to build new houses and roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

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Architecture
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The architecture
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of
buildings
present in a city inculcates the culture of the place,yet old
buildings
can be dangerous to a city because old structures can become fragile in the situation of
earthquack
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earthquake
or any other natural disaster.Local authorities have been spending
huge
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amount
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amounts
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on
restoration
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the restoration
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of ancient
buildings
rather the spending on new projects.I partially concur
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that
sufficient
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amount should be spent
for
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the renovation of older structures.
Additionally
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on
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building new living spaces,
provide
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and provide
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accomodation
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accommodation
for local individuals.
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essay will discuss both views. Ancient
buildings
made in the era of our forefathers
inculcates
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heritage and convey cultural values to the upcoming generation.
Therefore
, renovation of the
buildings
has become
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necessity
necessary
neccessity
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to keep the heritage alive and keep them intact so
it
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could not demolish by any means of disaster.
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these can be
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source
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of tourist attractions that will ultimately boost the economy.
For instance
,Kate
Midelton
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Middleton
,Duchess of Cambridge Visited Pakistan in
year
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2015,in an interview she stated that
,
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she was contended to see the architecture built in
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is
also
present here in Pakistan which was made by their forefathers before independence,and still those
buildings
are intact and maintained by the government.
On the other
hand
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Government officials should
also
spend funds on establishing new living spaces for the
accomodation
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accommodation
of local people,and to meet the need of
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population
popullation
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additionally
funds should be allocated for the making
on
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new roads
Consequently
, inter-city travelling would become easier for local people.
for instance
,after heavy Moonsoon rainfall in Karachi,roads were completely damaged because of water blockage which resulted in the
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of roads
due to
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that inter-city travelling had become difficult for people. In a
nut shell
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,Higher authorities should not only spend funds for the restoration but spend
fundings
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funding
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on establishing new projects that make
the
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life easier for
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the nation
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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