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Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #country #health #service #treatments
Medical
services
, without cost,
is
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are
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 very hard to be distributed to every
citizens
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citizen
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 which
are
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is
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 very costly. I strongly disagree with those free
services
 provided by
Government
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the Government
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, as its complete wastage of the country's economy in
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irrelevant
irrelevent
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an irrelevent
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 way. People often are suffering from a
lot
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oflot
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 new diseases which are expensive to get treated. The authority if provides all facilities without payments,
then
 it might result to
negetive
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negative
 impact as
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the patient
a patient
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patient
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patients
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 may take that care for granted and there is
high
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a high
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 chance of being
misuse
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a misuse
the misuse
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 of medicines and goods. For which
atleast
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at least
 if some amounts are allocated for
treatment
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a treatment
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 procedure, those will have proper follow-up and it results to
better
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a better
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 outcome as well as collecting revenue from the locals, ultimately
ading
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adding
 help for sustainable growth in finance and health sector.
For example
, village health post
services
 are very less or of no cost which makes community people not to visit there because they think it's not providing good
services
 and medicines are outdated which is not true
infact
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in fact
.
Similarly
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,Similarly
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 if some amount is charged they believe that organization provides good service which resultantly leads to
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a getter
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getter
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better
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 allowance to run that service
further
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furthermore
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more
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apply
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. In conclusion, if some payments are required for getting treatment
then
 it will help in
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long run
longrun
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the longrun
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 for its
continual
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continued
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 health
services
.
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