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Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #country #health #service #treatments
I agree that every
country
 should have a free
health
service
. Free
health
service
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services
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which
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apply
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should
inlucde
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include
 basic treatments. As we know developing
country
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countries
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don't
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doesn't
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 have adequate hospitals, where
people
 from different
part
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parts
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 of the
country
 have to rely on
city
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the city
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 and have to travel
long
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a long
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 way for that. If every
country
have
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has
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atleast
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at least
 basic free
health
 services
to
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for
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 each
villages
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village
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 or ward, where they can get
facilties
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facilities
 like consult doctors or
alteast
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latest
health
service
 workers to know about their
helath
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health
 conditions only it will really be helpful. As per my
experience
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,experience
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i
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I
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 have seen in my
country
, where big hospitals have
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latest
latested
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the latested
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 medical devices but lack of experienced doctors who can make
a
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good use out of it have failed in making good use of the devices.
Where
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Whereas
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as in
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villages
people
 are deprived of basic
health
 services,
this
 has resulted in
very
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a very
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 serious
issue
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issues
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 with one's life. If
people
 with
simple
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the simple
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illness
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illnesses
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 can be diagnosed at
early
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an early
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 stage with help of
doctor
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a doctor
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 consultation only,
than
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then
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 it doesn't require for latest means of medical treatment, but if these simple
illness
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illnesses
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 of
people
 are not able to get
health
 services at their level it might get worse. So as prevention is better than cure
,
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 if every
country
 can provide a free
health
service
 it can save
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of life and
also
a
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the
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 cost and expenses of
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the patient
a patient
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patient
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patients
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 when timely diagnosed.
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