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Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #country #health #service #treatments
I agree that every
country
 should have a free
health
 service. Free
health
services
 should include basic treatments. As we know developing countries
doesn't
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don't
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 have adequate hospitals, where
people
 from different parts of the
country
 have to rely on the city and have to travel a long way for that. If every
country
 has at least basic free
health
services
 for each village or ward, where they can get facilities like consult doctors or latest
health
 service workers to know about their
health
 conditions only it will really be helpful. As per my ,experience I have seen in my
country
, where big hospitals have the
latested
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latest
 medical devices but lack of experienced doctors who can make good use out of it have failed in making good use of the devices. Whereas villages
people
 are deprived of basic
health
services
,
this
 has resulted in
a very serious issues
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very serious issues
a very serious issue
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 with one's life. If
people
 with
the
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simple illnesses can be diagnosed at an early stage with help of a doctor consultation only,
then
 it doesn't require for latest means of medical treatment, but if these simple illnesses of
people
 are not able to get
health
services
 at their level it might get worse. So as prevention is better than cure if every
country
 can provide a free
health
 service it can save a lot of life and
also
 the cost and expenses of patients when timely diagnosed.
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