The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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healthcare

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has been improved significantly in the

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century.

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, some believe that the average health of individuals is going to reduce in the future. To my way of thinking,

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healthcare

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is actually going to improve and fewer people will get sick.

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healthcare

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is going to improve, Because, rapid technological advancements and new scientific discoveries will introduce higher quality

healthcare

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and more significant, make it widespread

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everyone could benefit from it.

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, New achievements in personalized medicine and precise prescriptions will be reducing adverse drug

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effects

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affects

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which are responsible for

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the inconvenience

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of patients or even deaths.

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, there will be

less disease

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fewer diseases

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50 years from now. The reason

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this

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is mostly because of social distance which has been

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a new habit recently. Though, less face to face

contacts

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means less transition of diseases

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humans.

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for Covid-19, social distancing helped a bunch to control the pandemic.

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many people have bad diet routines and eat unhealthy food

everyday

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, the number of those who care about their food intake is gradually increasing.

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, these days people can buy special food provided for

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dietary

group

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, like vegetarians, in every

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supermarket

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super market

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. In summary,

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will be more precise

healthcare

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along with

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a fewer

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number of

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diseases in the future. my short term view on

healthcare

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is that it

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on how fast the science advances. Though, I hope to see

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improvements any time sooner.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

1. Standard of health
2. Average
3. Lower
4. Future
5. Aging population
6. Chronic diseases
7. Sedentary lifestyle
8. Lack of exercise
9. Poor dietary habits
10. Environmental pollution
11. Technological advancements
12. Impact on health

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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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