Damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of the improvement in the standard of living. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Many people claim that we unavoidably lead to environmental issues if we develop living quality. I totally agree with
this
opinion.
Firstly
, the process that we improved our living standard has proved
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the point. People’s history of living development is to chase a convenient living way and it
cause
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many issues.
For instance
, the invention of the plane satisfies
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the human’s
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human’s
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dream
which
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can
travel
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to other countries in an extremely short time, but it has to utilize petrol and inevitably exhausts much poisonous fume.
Moreover
, those
gas
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can cause many environmental problems
such
as global warming and acid rain. If we want to solve the problem, we have to sacrifice the convenience
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modern tools provide us.
Secondly
, there are some reasons we are still made to exploit nature. In the aspects of clean-energy technology, it is hardly used widely because it is not a mature skill now and individuals have to pay highly for the expensive cost of its development.
For example
,
the
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solar electric cars,
although
they have been sold in many countries, the higher
price
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than the same type, but petrol energy
auto
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, make them hard to sell.
Instead
of the difficulty of popularizing clean energy, we have not found an appropriate substitution for animal tests. Scientists have to kill animals for medicines that can save many people’s
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. In conclusion, if we want to improve our life qualities, we have to damage the environment. I hope we can develop technologies that can care about both the standard of living and the environment.
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