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Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries. How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?

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The pandemic has caused
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havoc in the market. Some professional fields have seen a great demand for
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, while in other fields, it is totally contradictory. In
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 huge recessions and they are not able to cope
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 competition with the new start-ups and it is even more difficult for those who did not finish school
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 trying to make a switch in their career path, but they cannot do it due to their lack of eligibility criteria.
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, unemployment happens due to a major reason;
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 between the studying pattern and trending technology. Especially,
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 conducted by The Times of India
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 shows that major students from
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 field
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 chosen to IT department as there is a surge in that field.
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, students feel
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pressure, from their family or society, to prove their worth and if they lack
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 they can choose
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 path
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 as criminal activity and they often fall victim to extremism, negative stereotypes and scams.
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 can affect mental and physical health, resulting in some kind of trauma, depression or obesity, sleep disorder or anxiety attacks.
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 hospital
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 a significant rise after covid. To sum up, I would like to say that, unemployment is an alarming situation resulting
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development of the nation.
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, nations should start necessary actions on it.
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