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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
abortion
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 rate is increasing significantly and it is a controversy all around the world. Some segments of society think that it should be legal and others argue that it should be banned. In
this
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both
 views will be discussed and
also
 illustrate my personal point of view regarding
to
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the
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abortion
. Standing with support's view,
abortion
 is a good thing for those couples who are not in
situation
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a situation
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 to take care of a
baby
. Mother's unintentionally become pregnant even though they do not want
child
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a child
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 at that stage.
For example
, many young girls pregnant who study in school or
colleges
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 and
they
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are not suppose
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 to
fulfill
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 the mother's responsibilities in
both
 financial and mental criteria.
Therefore
abortion
 should allow legally
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 will help give a right to
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couples
that
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when they want to take a
baby
.
On the other hand
,
abortion
 is a crucial
act
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 for a mother's health as well as a murder of a
baby
. A girl can face many health problems due to
abortion
such
 as physical
disorder
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, breast cancer,
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joint pain
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joint-pain
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 and many other diseases.
However
, considering the threat
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 female life, it should be banned. In conclusion, we have discussed
both
 views
abortion
 should be banned or it should be legally allowed and
also
 have seen
side
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 effects of
both
. I would like to say here,
most
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 of the time people abort a
baby
 due to their financial problems.
Therefore
, I should be banned but the government should make some policies for financial support for
child
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a child
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 take
caring
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.
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