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Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show affection to them. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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It is a tradition, in most cultures, to give presents to
others
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 to
show
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 affection.
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, there are numerous other ways to
show
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 our love and respect,
for example
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, spending time together, talking to each other, helping each other, etc. Some people think that it is still very important to give
gifts
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 and presents.
On the contrary
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,
others
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 questioned the importance
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 suggesting better ways to
show
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 our affection. In
this
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 essay, both sides will be discussed and I will try to draw a conclusion at the end.
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, by offering
gifts
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 we can
show
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 our engagement in one relationship.
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, a birthday is one of the most common scenarios in which we send
gifts
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. In
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 a scenario, by sending
gifts
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, one proves that not only does he remember the birthday, but
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 spent money and effort to purchase a birthday present.
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gifts
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 always mean a lot and become a very important behaviour in our social life.
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,
others
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 argue that there are better ways which have more emotional attachments,
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 as talking to each other or keeping
others
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 in accompany. To illustrate, my grandmother and grandfather live in a small village far from any of their child, and they always want us( their children and grandchildren) to spend longer time with them in the small village because for them no present can compare to our accompany.
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 we can see there are better alternatives for showing love. To sum up, both sides of the argument have strong
supports
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. But after thorough analysis, I believe maintaining good relationships requires more than sending
gifts
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. It is predictable that friends spending more time together have stronger connections than friends buying more expensive presents for each other.
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