Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time ,and have health problems as a result . Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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during the day should be devoted .To motivate workers,definite types of bonuses like having the chance of taking days off or free trips would be a supportive idea . To sum up , having
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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