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Some people say that it is best to be loyal and to work for one company during one’s life. Others take the opposite view and say it is better to change jobs frequently in one’s life. Discuss these positions, using specific examples of both. Then tell which one you agree with and explain why?

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It is often said by certain individuals that working for a single firm for the whole life is extremely beneficial while another side of society
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 that having multiple
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 in employment is more advantageous. While there are certain merits of the
first
 view, I would argue that
latter
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 is more significant. The
pro of
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 being loyal to a single
company
 for a complete
lifetime
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 is that one will become a valuable asset to the
company
 because of one's vast experience in the same field which is a boon to any employee during any uncertain circumstances. Since if any market crash happens anytime, people with
high
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 amount of experience within the same
company
 would not get fired conveniently, whereas others who change their jobs frequently get laid-off mostly.
For example
, as per a study conducted by the department of education in the USA, during the recession of 2008, 70% of the people who have not been working in
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 same place for
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at least
 10
years
 got fired.
However
, changing a new job
after
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every couple of
year
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years
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 is excellent for
the
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career growth in terms of
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financial income.
This
 is because most
of
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the
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new employer easily gives
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at least
 40% raise to the new employee;
on the contrary
, as per the market
standards
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 maximum 20% increment in salary has been given
for
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 the workers of the same
company
.
For Instance
, as per a
suvery
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survey
 in -'The Times'- every 7 out of 10 people who changes
atleast
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at least
 4
job
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jobs
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 in their
first
 10
years
 of experience have more chances of becoming a millionaire rather than others who do not.
Therefore
, one can secure their future without any worries, if they earn more money. To conclude,
although
 having employment in a single
company
 for whole life has certain pros, I believe that switching jobs after every 3
years
 or 4
years
 is more essential due to the high increment in salary.
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