IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

#people #work #company #organisation #be #case
Over
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
time
, more and more
people
 prefer to
work
 for themselves rather than for someone else, like a
courpany
Correct your spelling
company
 or organisation. The most important reason for
this
 situation is the feeling that
people
 create, they feel independent.
However
, being self-employed make them feel insecure, as long as they do not have a stable
income
. Obviously, being
the
Change the word
your
show examples
 employer of yourself makes you feel independent.
People
 can organise their
time
 and
work
 any
time
 they want, not a regular 9-5
work
.
Moreover
, they could set the price catalogue on their own,
therefor
Correct your spelling
therefore
show examples
to gain
Change the verb form
gaining
show examples
 more money.
For example
, my husband is a self-employed bricklayer, he selects the jobs that he
want
Change the verb form
wants
show examples
 to undertake, he determines the prices and until he finishes the job, he could
work
 as hard as he
want
Change the verb form
wants
show examples
, he can even not go
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
work
 for a day.
On the other hand
, not having a fixed
income
 makes
people
 insecure. Bills need to be paid every have
month
Add an article
a month
show examples
,
thus
 a salary is really important.
Moreover
, if you have a basic salary, you can calculate and plan the
expanses
Correct your spelling
expenses
show examples
,
the
Correct word choice
and the
show examples
 saving and it is easier to schedule trips on your days off.
In addition
, being self-employed means that you could
work
 any
time
, even
at
Change preposition
on
show examples
 your days off, you will think about
work
, or send an important e-mail,
as a
result
Add the comma(s)
,result
show examples
 it will be hard to enjoy your free
time
. In conclusion, many
people
 choose to be self-employed, so they could plan their
time
 and their
income
 on their own, but
this
 can have disadvantages like not having a stable
income
 and not managing your
time
 properly.
Submitted by lecinikoleta on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
What to do next:
Look at other essays: