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Air travel should be restricted because of pollution and uses up the world's fuel. Agree or disagree?

#air #travel #pollution #world #fuel
At present in the
world
 we all are living -in, It has become way too
modren
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modern
 and fast. In terms of
technology
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,technology
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 everyone looks for an easy and quick way to
travel
. And talking about
the
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traveling
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travelling
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, "
Air
Travel
" is one of the greatest
option
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options
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 to
travel
 anywhere around the
world
. So
i
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 believe that
air
travel
 should not be restricted but we should
also
 take care of our planet as well
take
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 care of our
srrounding
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surrounding
surroundings
.
Traveling
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 is one of the major
part
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parts
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 of our lifestyle and
traveling
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travelling
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 via
Aroplane
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Aeroplane
 has become one of the most frequent
thing
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things
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. As per me Why
travel
 us important, Because it connects us with the
world
 easily. If we talk about
development
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the development
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 of any country in any business
feild
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field
 via
travling
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travelling
 around
world
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the world
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 it
enhance
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enhances
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 the chances of growth in business as well it
help
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helps
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 in the growth of an individual's life. As
i
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I
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 mention
travling
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travelling
 around the
world
 helps us to grow more in business it
also
 helps us to
boste
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boost
 the economy of the country. But while
travling
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travelling
, If
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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 is allowing us to
travel
 freely and safely
also
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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 needs to take precautions how to prevent
from
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the
air
 pollution
that is
casuing
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causing
 due to
air
travel
 and
also
 need to take care of
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environment
enviroment
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the enviroment
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. In my
opinion
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traveling
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travelling
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 should not be
hundred
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a hundred
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precent
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per cent
 restricted but
goverment
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government
 should make some
polices
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policies
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 around the
world
 that how we all can contribute to
save
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 the
enviroment
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environment
 without stopping any services. In order to make our
envirment
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environment
 safe from pollution what minimum an individual can do is that we all should try to take public transport
insted
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instead
 of using our own private
vehcile
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vehicle
 that will
helps
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 in
decresing
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decreasing
 the pollution level each day. To conclude
this
eassy
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essay
easy
, I admit that in
this
 era technology has become
advance
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advanced
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 and we people always
tries
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try
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 to find convenient ways to make
in
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progress but we all
also
 need to keep our
enviorment
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environment
 safe and
settel
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settle
 for
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future
futuer
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the futuer
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 as well.
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