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Is economic development necessary to reduce poverty or should economic growth be stopped as it is damaging the enviorment. Discuss both sides.

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Developement
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Development
 or growth is a major part of our basic lifestyle. Without any progress in our daily
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routine
roution
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 our life will become meaningless and if we talk about
ecomonic
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economic
development
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, it is a great option for all of us to do some progress in our overall lifestyle. So economic
development
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 is necessary to reduce poverty and that provides us
a
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better living standard.
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, we need to take care of our
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enviroment
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environment
 and should look after it and prevents
from
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it from
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 getting
damage
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 in all ways. At present in the 20th century, we all can witness that our
genration
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generation
 has become way too selfish that we do not care about anyone around us. As we are discussing here that
econominc
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economic
 growth can really be
helpfull
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helpful
 for everyone to grow but it has
also
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 some major
challanges
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challenges
 towards against the
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enviroment
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environment
 or
nautre
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nature
. As far as we talk about
development
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, so without industrial area, new advance factories which will
paly
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play
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 a major role in economic growth but it will
also
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 lead or promotes the pollution that will cause harm to the forests but cutting
tress
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trees
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 to build or
settel
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settle
 new industry or factory. It will
also
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destory
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destroy
 the sea or
rivers
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 water. So far, As we have discussed that economic
development
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 helps to
promot
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promote
 a better and
advance
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advanced
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 living standard with high profile jobs or it gives us all
sort
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sorts
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 of
easiy
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easy
easily
 going living
opportunites
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opportunities
.
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, It has more disadvantages
towards
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for
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 the
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enviroment
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environment
beacuse
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because
 economic
development
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are
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 not going to develop without harming the
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enviroment
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environment
 or surrounding. Economic
development
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 is all about
to enhance
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 the raise in
the
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apply
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production, majorly
into
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in
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industrial
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the industrial
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 sector and by developing that sector that will lead to air pollution, water pollution and
other sort
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another sort
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 of drawbacks
towards
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to
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 the
nautre
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nature
.

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