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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is a debate that it is rather important to learn the process of cooking, while others think that the students should focus on other subjects. I agree with
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ideas
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, and in the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss both views and suggest my opinion. On the one hand, there are several advantages of knowing cooking.
Firstly
,
as a result
 of
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 fact that nowadays the majority of people are moving away from their families, fundamental skills
such
 as cooking and cleaning are increasingly important while living independently.
Secondly
,
this
 might assist students to lead healthy lifestyles via
food
 and nutrition instruction, and help them to improve their mental and physical health through specially designed diets.
For example
, the consumption of
home-made
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food
 has more beneficial aspects than eating snacks or fast
food
, which is harmful
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 humanity and their health conditions.
On the other hand
, learning academic subjects over
industry
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the industry
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 of
food
. It is known that
food
 science as a subject does not have much scope in the market, which means that having
food
prepareing
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preparing
 skills can not guarantee
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better
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 future.
Moreover
, it requires
umderstanding
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understanding
 various scientific concepts, which not everyone can find easy.
For instance
, academic subjects are rather important to get
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usefull
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useful
 skills on the sphere students choose, and provide more opportunities to create a successful future. In conclusion,
although
 individuals think that concentrating on learning how to prepare
food
 is rather important than
academic
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 field.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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