Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Some
people
live their whole
life
in native places rather than moving to other areas.
This
habit has a few advantages,
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but there
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are some disadvantages
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are worth considering. Because of family and property
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they might not wish to relocate from their own place
hence
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and hence
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could miss a lot of great job opportunities in their
life
.
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essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects.
Firstly
, the main benefit is easily getting family support
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a personal career.
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, if we grew up with parents, they will look after us and siblings will assist us to study well. And
also
they will recommend based on their own experience to screw up our
life
smoothly.
In addition
, financially can able to be stable and do not need to take risks because capital investment can get from relatives.
For instance
, my father and mother did not move out of any place even
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within our district but they have been being full of happiness and satisfaction. The main drawbacks are
people
can not able gain vast knowledge about their professional
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career
and unable to experience
othe
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other
the
cultures. If
people
do not move out from their own city, they will not get any risk and
selft
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self
decesion
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decision
decisions
in
thier
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their
life
.
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Furthermore
they will not get a chance to know about different technologies as well,
eventhough
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even though
graduated students sometimes
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to step up their
life
to get a new chance outside of their province
otherwise
they may not able to develop
thier
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their
professional skills. In conclusion, some
people
did not step away from their mother lane and stay
life
long there.
This
essay discussed why
people
have not migrated and probably they think that they will not get family support
however
they will miss good job offers as well. In my point of view, after
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degree
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people
should move away from their home town which will lead to developing a lot.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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