Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Most people believe History is the most necessary subject in school. Other
persons
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suppose that, nowadays, Science and Technology are more important than History.
First
of all, History is one of the most popular
subjects
. It is very interesting for students. Pupils can know about different civilizations and their development.
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they can learn various customs and traditions.
Furthermore
, they study a lot of stories about
culture
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the culture
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of nations.
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other hand
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, Science and Technology are one of
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important
subjects
at present. It is a technological century and these
subjects
are very necessary.
Thus
, many students are into these items.
Furthermore
, they
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their life with
subjects
, because, there are a lot of professions in
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sphere
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it is
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paid and popular. In conclusion, those
subjects
are both popular and very necessary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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