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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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In the present-day world, Illiteracy is being
concerned
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 many countries. I believe there are two main causes of being unlettered in the present times and a number of damaging effects. Probably the main cause is
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abysmal poverty; having
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extremely poor and bad living
condition
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 mainly results in
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 education.
For example
, parents who live in low-income homes are less likely to send their children to school to
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literate;
in addition
, they can not afford to buy school supplies. Another cause is that
people
 living in remote areas
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 to stay illiterate. Remote areas are far away from civilization;
therefore
, it is impracticable
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 participate in socializing. The effects of
this
 problem on the
people
 and
society
 can be quite serious.
Firstly
, there can be communication problems
such
 as online communication which is being widely used across the globe for both professional and personal purposes. It occurs via e-mail, social media, sites, chat rooms and blogs.
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, communicating
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 individuals who do not read and write is quite challenging for
people
.
Secondly
, illiteracy may impact
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society
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 unhealthy way. Statistics agree that
people
 struggling with literacy mostly miss out on opportunities to participate fully in
society
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workplace
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the workplace
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.
This
 situation exacerbates their source of income; on the other hand, they will have no tax liability. In conclusion, the causes of
this
 trend are primarily to do with poverty, and the effects are involved both the individuals and
society
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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