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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

#success #wealth #belongings #measure #person
There is no denying the fact that
money
 is vital in our life and
also
 plenty of people think
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succeed
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 is depend if you are rich or not, so with some
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 I agree with these people, in
this
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explain
 all the points.
To begin
 with,
Firstly
, the measure of
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 could be different from person to person, because to somewhat realise
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how they think? or their passion.
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clear
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 example, the majority of students could go with teaching Arabic at school or online and they become famous because they have
theirs
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 own way of teaching easier.
By contrast
, some of them will find it boring and it is only wasting of time, maybe because they are not interested
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 learning Arabic.
Secondly
, It
is commonly know
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 that
money
 does not bring happiness, so
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this
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 I am neutral with
this
, If we look
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 kids who have a rich family
which
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 can let them learn
with
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the international schools and always make
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 go to different courses to improve themselves so when they grow up that will make them more successful even though the kids who could not take enough education and learn new skills maybe they had to work or they have stingy parents they did not give the
money
. to sum up, I consider that there is no doubt
money
 might make our lives easier and reach our goals faster but it does not make us successful
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 plenty of people.
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