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Some people believe that exams are an inappropriate way of measuring students’ performance and should be replaced by continuous assessment. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

#people #exams #students’ #performance
Exams have long been regarded as the best tool for evaluating a
students
’ academic performance;
however
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 they still remain some restrictions. I would argue that the
exam
 method should be tailored to each individual student’s character. There is no denying that
students
 perform better in continuous assessments if they have good
self-discipline
.
This kind
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 of
people
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 a strong sense of urgency. They always make sure that they perform consistently well in continuous
assessment
. Whereas,
students
 who do not have good
self-discipline
 will struggle with continuous
assessment
 as their habits of procrastination will get in the way of them performing well in each continuous
assessment
.
On the other hand
, it does not mean that
students
 who do not have good
self-discipline
 will necessarily perform any worse in an
exam
 than
students
 who have great
self-discipline
. The former probably prefer putting all their concentration on an
exam
 to diverting their concentration on different assessments, as the former’s sense of urgency tends only to pick up near an
exam
 period
that is
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 unrepeatable basis. Merely because
students
 study at the
last
 minute does not mean that their understanding of a topic will not be as good as
students
 who study consistently.
On the other hand
,
students
 who have good
self-discipline
 and study consistently may
also
 experience burnout near an
exam
 period, thereby not performing as well as they should have. In conclusion, I think that neither exams nor continuous
assessment
is
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 the best tool for measuring
students
’ performance and that the
exam
 method should be tailored to each individual student’s character.
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