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Some people think that because of email, social media and telephones, communication among people is less personal now than it used to be. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Communicating with friends and family is very important for humans. High technologies made that communication quicker than a century ago. Some people argue that the advance in computers made that
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 with, social media bring people from all over the world together a lot faster than it used to be. Discussing various subjects with people from the other side of Earth became a simple task to do thanks to the Internet. Engineers made that change possible a couple of decades ago. To illustrate, I am living in Australia, and, with my family still residing in France, I can speak with them anytime I want, which makes it practical for us to share details from our lives. Without that communication channel, I could not live that far away from home.
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 to the above, thanks to social media, we can
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 video chat with our friends. Making a call more interactive can bring us closer to the person in front of the smartphone.
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