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Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is quite common that many celebrities, like movie
stars
 and famous athletes, participate in
activities
 held by international aid organizations. Opinions are divided on how their support affects these
activities
. I believe that famous
people
’s involvement in charitable events can definitely attract more attention and provide more help to the problems. On the one hand, there has been a concern that the importance of charitable
activities
 may be weakened with the presence of many famous
people
.
This
 is because fans of the movie
stars
 or the NBA legends may pay more attention to how their idols dress
themselves
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or whether they are in the
center
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 of the stage. What is worse, tabloids lead readers to the
gossips
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 or scandals of the celebrities
instead
 of how much they contribute to helping
people
 in need.
This
 explains why many
people
 worry that famous
people
 may have a negative effect on the charitable activity they participate in.
On the other hand
, advocates of celebrities’ support
towards
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 worldwide pressing issues believe that they have
such
 significant influence on millions of
people
 following their accounts on social media,
such
 as Twitter or Facebook. When these famous
people
 deliver a speech
in
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 a fundraising gala or make a donation to an organization towards assisting needy
people
 in
third
 world countries, their followers may contribute their own effort to combating the same problems.
For example
, in 2015, hundreds of sports
stars
 and Nobel Prize winners who took part in a series of
activities
 named the Ice Bucket Challenge successfully promoted awareness of the disease ALS and encouraged donations to research. Personally, my view is that while the attention of the public may be drawn from the event itself to the
stars
 they are interested in,
this
 usually lasts for a short period of time. Support from these famous
people
, in the long term, will play a significant role in arousing
people
's awareness
towards
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 the issues that need to be addressed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • international aid organizations
  • public awareness
  • amplify
  • advocacy
  • systemic change
  • oversimplification
  • trivialization
  • undermining
  • severity
  • misinformed advocacy
  • distorts
  • hamper
  • guided by experts
  • constructive
  • strategically
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