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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar.which causes many health problems.Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,manufacturers tend to produce food and drink goods which are consisted of a high amount of
sugar
.For
this
 reason,it causes many diseases for
people
 in later life.Some
people
 believe that in order to reduce sugary production.In my opinion,I strongly disagree with
this
solution
.The following cases and examples below will help support my point of view.
Sugar
 is considered to be the most significant additive to make food more appetizing.
In addition
,citizens can observe that
sugar
 is added to their daily diets
such
 as bread and dessert which are mainly in their consumption and are inevitable to consume.If the cost of
sugar
 has risen considerably,it extremely affects
people
's diets.On top of that,not all
people
 are prosperous,so it is obvious that some
people
 are poor.How about poor
people
 if they increase the price of sugary products? What should do they eat?.
Therefore
,
this
solution
 provides an adverse effect on all residents,especially poor
people
 who have a low quality of life and consumption. One way is that the population should focus on the essential impact that has a detrimental effect on their health.At the moment,it is the best way to raise awareness of
people
 in the way they consume.Billboards and any kind of advertising play an important role that they can express and
elaborate
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 on the disadvantages of
sugar
 consumption.
Moreover
,the government has to launch a new campaign to advocate for
people
 to decrease the amount of
sugar
 intake and
also
 inform manufactured factories to use fewer levels of
sugar
.
Thus
,many
people
 become healthy because of
this
solution
. In conclusion,increasing the price is not to be the most practical
solution
 in
this
 case.
However
,the majority of
people
 should aware of what are they eating.The cases and examples mentioned above have supported my point of view.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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