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Students do not respect their teachers as much as they did in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Note: This essay uses our new

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In my opinion, I believe that young people do not have as much respect for their teachers as in the past. I feel
this
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to begin
 with,there are many ways for students to learn nowadays, which means they are less reliant on teachers than in the past. A few years ago, children could only acquire new skills by going to school and attending classes, so they respected their faculty a lot. My personal experience is a compelling example of
this
. For the past few years, I have studied English almost every single day. I
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 my vocabulary by using some applications for the
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 language and over the
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. which helps me learn
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new stuff daily. and I
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 practice them daily.
Consequently
, I feel classes with a faculty member are not as
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important as they used to be. If I had tried to become proficient in English around 15 years ago, I would have depended on a teacher.
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, faculty are no longer strict nowadays,
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 children don’t fear them at all.
This
 problem is very common in
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 time.
For instance
, a few months ago my little brother used profanity when addressing his math coach. Surprisingly, he wasn’t punished for
such
 bad behaviour. His teacher was afraid of how our parents would react to my brother being punished, so he just ignored it. Since
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 and is often quite rude. Based on
this
 experience, I strongly feel that young people do not respect educators like they did in the past. in n nutshell, I am of the opinion that nowadays
also
 students honour their educators less than they used to do in the past.
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task response
Ensure that your examples and reasons directly address the prompt
coherence and cohesion
Work on connecting your ideas and examples more cohesively throughout the essay

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Hierarchical
  • Individualism
  • Reverence
  • Educators
  • Collaborative
  • Authoritarian
  • Passive
  • Active participation
  • Social norms
  • Questioning authority
  • Fallibility
  • Misconduct
  • Role models
  • Criticize
  • Challenge
  • Inadvertently
  • Entertainment media
  • Depict
  • Favourable light
  • Strain
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