In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. To what extent do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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It is undeniable that some
countries
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have a tendency
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import
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amount of
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from overseas.
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,
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this
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can bring about some benefits, I strongly argue that its negative aspects are noticeable. On the one hand, it is understandable why some governments heavily rely on some
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other
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. Indeed, trading
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food
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is considered not only an effective way to keep
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supply for their
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but it will
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reasonable.
By importing
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foods from
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countries
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which have competitive laboured
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can complete the lack of the amount of
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.
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, Korea has been importing most of the basic
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such
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as rice and flour from China because the quality of rice is quite similar to those of in Korea and the
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price is much cheaper than the cost of inner supply.
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, the governments that handle the various transported
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believe that transported
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can keep
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safety
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in
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economical way.
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,
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situation can get drawbacks.
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, the power of the country can be weakened because of the dependence on imported
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. Specifically,
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, if China made
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to stop trading with Korea,
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Korea’s
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safety would be able to vulnerable.
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, heavily relying on foods from other
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can allow the country to be in danger situation
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the world. In conclusion, the governments can handle
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the
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supply easily by using
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food
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trade system, it is
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vital for the government to have self supply in terms of
food
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safety.
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