«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

Nowadays,
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try to spend a lot of
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sports facilities for both
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and ordinary people. Some individuals think that
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should pay more for sports equipment for sportsmen, while others think that they should organize them more
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conventional people. I think
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that administration must use
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the money
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for
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tools equally for all of us. In my point of view, ordinary ones cannot
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as top
atheletes
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, or improve their physical health, if
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would focus only on gymnasts. But if we would try to spend more
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simple people,
atheletes
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can suffer from
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of sports facilities, which made them disability to improve their skills.
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waste more
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facilities
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sportsmen, citizens wouldn't
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opportunity,
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their health. To sum up, I don't think that they should spend more cash
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athlete
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, because, in my opinion,
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should try to assure both.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elite sports facilities
  • national pride
  • international events
  • participation
  • high-quality
  • performance
  • national representation
  • fairness
  • social issues
  • population health
  • well-being
  • accessible
  • inclusive
  • community involvement
  • sponsorship
  • endorsements
  • recreational facilities
  • inspire
  • younger generations
  • serious pursuit
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