«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

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try to spend a lot of

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sports facilities for both

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and ordinary people. Some individuals think that

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should pay more for sports equipment for sportsmen, while others think that they should organize them more

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conventional people. I think

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that administration must use

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tools equally for all of us. In my point of view, ordinary ones cannot

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as top

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would focus only on gymnasts. But if we would try to spend more

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simple people,

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of sports facilities, which made them disability to improve their skills.

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waste more

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their health. To sum up, I don't think that they should spend more cash

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should try to assure both.

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

elite sports facilities
national pride
international events
participation
high-quality
performance
national representation
fairness
social issues
population health
well-being
accessible
inclusive
community involvement
sponsorship
endorsements
recreational facilities
inspire
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«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

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