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«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

#«some #people #governments #money #sports #facilities #athletes
Nowadays,
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 try to spend a lot of
money
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 sports facilities for both
athlete
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 and ordinary people. Some individuals think that
government
 should pay more for sports equipment for sportsmen, while others think that they should organize them more
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 conventional people. I think
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 that administration must use
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the money
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 for
sport
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 tools equally for all of us. In my point of view, ordinary ones cannot
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 as top
atheletes
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athletes
, or improve their physical health, if
government
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 would focus only on gymnasts. But if we would try to spend more
money
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 simple people,
atheletes
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athletes
 can suffer from
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 of sports facilities, which made them disability to improve their skills.
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, if we would
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waste more
money
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 facilities
to
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 sportsmen, citizens wouldn't
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 opportunity,
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,
support
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 their health. To sum up, I don't think that they should spend more cash
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athlete
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, because, in my opinion,
government
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 should try to assure both.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elite sports facilities
  • national pride
  • international events
  • participation
  • high-quality
  • performance
  • national representation
  • fairness
  • social issues
  • population health
  • well-being
  • accessible
  • inclusive
  • community involvement
  • sponsorship
  • endorsements
  • recreational facilities
  • inspire
  • younger generations
  • serious pursuit
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