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Is economic development necessary to reduce poverty or should economic growth be stopped as it is damaging the environment. Discuss both side.

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In the existing era of
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twentieth-century
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twentieth
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the twentieth
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 century where we all are
living-in
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living in
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, Economic
development
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 is a major concept. To live a
life
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 with all
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comfort and with better living standard every individual have to participate or contribute
in
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the
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economic
development
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. On the other
hnad
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hand
, Not everyone is in the favour of
development
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 side. As they do have
concern
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 regarding the
safty
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safety
 of
environment
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. For that side
of
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majority
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the majority
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 economic
development
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 is not everything.
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, we are going to discuss
about
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both
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sides.
Firstly
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, As we were discussing that economic
development
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 is an important part of
life
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 and if we talk about
to remove
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 poverty, economic
development
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 is the only way to vanish
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poverty from an
individuals
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life
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
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in area
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area
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areas
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 like job
employments
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employment
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, equality, business growth,
lifes
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life
 security to
achive
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achieve
 all these aspects we need to be part of
ecomonic
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economic
development
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. At the same time, we all need to look after the
environment
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. We should not only focus on the
development
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 simultaneously each and every person needs to keep the
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environment
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environment's
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 safety in the mind. Because we all know that without
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector nobody can think about
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development
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. One clear example of
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector's
development
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 is all the
multinationl
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multinational
multi national
 companies are setting up in the rural area
likr
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like
 Gurugram or Noida. In
this
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 event, All these
MNC's
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 are providing
employments
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employment
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 but they are taking over the land or forests.
Obviously
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this
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 leads to deforestation or if they are setting up a mechanical industry that all will lead to air and water pollution. To conclude
this
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 essay, If
econominc
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economic
 growth is providing us
a
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better living option
on the other hand
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 it is taking our land and other sources which is
harmfull
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harmful
 to the
environment
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 as well as to the
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wildlife
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wild
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wildlife
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life
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 and ti the
nautre
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nature
. I think
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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 should plan some
poicly
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policy
 or guidelines with which we all can take part in
econominc
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economic
development
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 without harming
the
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nature.

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