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Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching. With the technology available today there is no justification for it, and everything should be done online. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

#lectures #auditoriums #numbers #students #technology #justification
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technology is taking place the human being . Offer classes in the theatre to
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. On the one side , everybody
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 that the use of technology is
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way
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education because
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 more time to learn rather than wasting by travel to school.According to the research
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 world emergency in COVID-19 everybody did classes online without going anywhere .
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 colleges and universities has limited seats .
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 for current educators. On
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, everyone is saying old is gold because they have extreme bundles of knowledge with experience live example which provides them
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 them
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 live experts that kinds of explanation automatically couldn't
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 them. To recapitulation,
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 essential part of moderate life so
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 should grab wherever they get from .
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 different types of software which provide knowledge of every corner of
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 not only specific fields.
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