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The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by the fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by the fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of
electricity
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 which was produced by the five distinct kinds of non-renewable sources from 1990 to 2010. After
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 it can be seen clearly that the percentile of natural gas was 28% for generating
electricity
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 which was the highest in 1990,
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 it declined by sex fold in the latter year. In ,contrast a negligible difference was seen in the proportion of hydropower sources that had been used to produce
electricity
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 in both years.
Apart from
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, oil took place
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second
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 position which was near about one in fifth in the former year but it lost popularity and came
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 13% in the latter year. The pie chart
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 collates that the percentage of natural gas was 28% and 4% in
the
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1990 and 2010.
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, the percentage of nuclear power was 84% collectively to generate
electricity
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 in both years.
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, a difference of 15% was witnessed in the utilization of coal as a source of energy in the given time period.
Overall
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, maximum
natural
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of natural
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 gas and coal were utilized for producing
electricity
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 in France
in
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is
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 1990,
while
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 the percentile of hydropower was
minimum
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the minimum
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 among France people in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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