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The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by the fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by the fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of
electricity
 which was produced by the five distinct kinds of non-renewable sources from 1990 to 2010. After
analyzing
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 it can be seen clearly that the percentile of natural gas was 28% for generating
electricity
 which was the highest in 1990,
while
 it declined by sex fold in the latter year. In ,contrast a negligible difference was seen in the proportion of hydropower sources that had been used to produce
electricity
 in both years.
Apart from
this
, oil took place
the
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second
 position which was near about one in fifth in the former year but it lost popularity and came
at
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 13% in the latter year. The pie chart
further
 collates that the percentage of natural gas was 28% and 4% in
the
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1990 and 2010.
However
, the percentage of nuclear power was 84% collectively to generate
electricity
 in both years.
Moreover
, a difference of 15% was witnessed in the utilization of coal as a source of energy in the given time period.
Overall
, maximum
natural
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 gas and coal were utilized for producing
electricity
 in France
in
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 1990,
while
 the percentile of hydropower was
minimum
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the minimum
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 among France people in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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