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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts, one for Canada and the other for Australia
,
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 break down the population into groups
according to
 the primary way in which they get their
news
. Specifically, the charts show the percentage of people who go to either
TV
, Radio, Print media or the
internet
 for
news
. There is
also
 a miscellaneous category for all other
sources
.
Overall
, the distribution shown in the pie charts is fairly similar with the
internet
 and
TV
 being the top two
news
sources
. More than
three quarters
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 of the people in both countries use one of these two
sources
. In detail, 76% of
the
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Canadians get their
news
 from either
TV
 or
Internet
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the Internet
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, in nearly equal proportions, 40% from
TV
 and 36% online. Australians show a stronger preference for the
Internet
; a majority use it
for
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 the primary source (52%), and an additional 37% watch
the
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TV
 for
news
.
All together
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, the four named
sources
 account for 97 to 98
percent
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 of the
populations
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. The least-used source is radio, with 7% of
the
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Canadians and only 2% of Australians. Print
news
 is twice as popular in Canada as
Australia
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in Australia
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, but the percentages are rather small, 14% and 7%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, tv, internet, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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