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Some people think that it is important to plant trees in an open areas of town and cities than to build more housing.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often urged that afforestation in open spaces is vital than
build
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building
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 more buildings in town .In my opinion,I disagree that planting
of
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trees
 is more important than building more
houses
. To a lesser extent ,it is more important to plant
trees
 in an open space of the country than
building
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to build
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 more
houses
.
Trees
 absorb carbon dioxide and produce oxygen.We
breath
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 in oxygen from the greenery.They provide us with shade and they
also
 beautify our country.
Trees
' roots
holds
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 the soil together and
they
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prevent soil erosion. To a greater extent, building more
houses
 is more important than planting vegetation.
This
 is because our population has increased,we need more
houses
 , business buildings ,schools and health care.Building more
houses
 is important because people need shelter to accommodate everyone.School facilities are
also
 important,we need enough school facilities to educate children.People's health is
also
 important,we need more hospitals and clinics for
the
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people to get help . In my opinion,building more
houses
 is more important than planting
trees
 because shelter is important. In conclusion,both
trees
 and buildings are important to human life and the environment.

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