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People living in large cites today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Cities
 worldwide are getting populated day by day. People move into
cities
 for various reasons.
However
, towns do not provide a quality lifestyle anymore. I think the government should take the necessary arrangements to relocate the population evenly and provide them with adequate facilities.
First
 and foremost, the masses living in
cities
 face many conflicts,
for example
, increase in the cost of living, traffic jams, crowded public transport, polluted air, improper waste disposal and unhealthy eating habits.
Moreover
,
this
 machinery lifestyle has caused many social issues leading to high rates of divorce and suicides.
Nevertheless
, they choose to live in major
cities
 because many amenities, anything we can imagine
of
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is just a step away. Like mega supermarkets, libraries, gyms, schools, hospitals , museums,
themeparks
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theme parks
,
auditorium
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 and many more.
On the other hand
,
development
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the development
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 of smaller towns in regional
areas
 should be undertaken by the government. Basic requirements should be met
at
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in
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this
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this area
these areas
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areas
for example
 schools, hospitals and supermarkets , As
then
 gradually people will move out of
cities
 and will colonize
in
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regional
areas
. To conclude by making the population scattered in all
areas
, pollution can be optimised, and a better life can be attributed to many people. The perception of
cozy
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 city life
,
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 is a misinterpretation , rather a peaceful life in a regional area should be welcomed in the future.
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