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Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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There are some companies that prepare
uniforms
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 for their
staffs
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 and require them to wear
at
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them at
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 all times. Some
people
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 consider the policy as necessary, while others think it is meaningless. In my opinion, there are advantages and disadvantages
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this
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 rule and we should
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apply
 it depending on the
situations
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. The advantages of wearing
uniforms
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 are obvious.
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, working in an office or in a hall is a formal occasion, and wearing
uniforms
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 can give
people
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 a sense of formality and seriousness.
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 shows
repect
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respect
 to the clients or other business partners and brings trust
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.
For example
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, when we go to the bank, the
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 there are wearing suits, and that gives
people
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 the impression that they will handle your matter professionally so that you can trust them fully.
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, wearing a uniform reminds
people
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 that they are at
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working hours, and they should concentrate on their
work
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instead
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 of wandering around. The standard
clothers
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cloth
does
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 draw
people
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's attention
on
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work
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. There is
a
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statistical support that
people
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 wearing
uniforms
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 actually have better working performance
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 those who do not.
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, the disadvantages should
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 be taken into account. Some jobs like design and decoration
expects
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people
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 to be innovative, but wearing too formal and too identical may lower
people
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's creativity and imagination.
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 why you hardly can see any artists dress in
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everyday
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. For those designers, wearing their own clothes may demonstrate their personality, and
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 can be reflected
on
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 their arts and designs.
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, some office workers may
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 their
motivations
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motivation
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 at
work
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 if they are required to wear
uniforms
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everyday
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. Some employees want to show their characteristics and wearing their own clothes can present their true
self
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selves
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 to their colleagues or clients. And the compliments they received may make them more positive at
work
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. In my opinion, wearing the same dresses may bring different outcomes. For those who are doing jobs in a more formal environment, wearing a uniform would be a wise decision.
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, wearing their own clothes would be a better choice.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniforms
  • staff
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • promotes
  • belonging
  • team spirit
  • professional
  • cohesive
  • image
  • security
  • identification
  • reduces
  • expenses
  • employees
  • decide
  • wear
  • fosters
  • equality
  • minimizes
  • differences
  • individuality
  • self-expression
  • uncomfortable
  • restrictive
  • body types
  • sizes
  • maintenance
  • cleanliness
  • control
  • restriction
  • personal style
  • fashion preferences
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