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In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion on the roads. What are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest.

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With the growing population in contemporary cities,
traffic
 is one of the major problems in today's world. Almost all
people
 are stuck in
traffic
 and waste time on the roads during their daily habits. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the main reasons for
this
 congestion and
then
 describe the possible solutions to the
problem
. It is obvious that most
people
 spend their time on the roads because of daily obligations. One common cause is growing populations in an unconscious way. Modern cities tend to face migrations and ,
consequently
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traffic
 problems occur. The other cause is the absence of sufficient common transportation vehicles.
For example
, during rush hours
people
 don't want to use
populous
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public
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 vehicles
due to
 the epidemic illnesses. I think that the
problem
 of
traffic
 results in
people
's mental health.
Thus
, it should be solved on both individual and governmental levels. I can suggest two possible solutions to
this
problem
.
Firstly
, with technological
developments
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developments,
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 some activities don't require face-to-face communication and they can be done by computers.
For instance
, shopping websites help us to order something and
people
 don't have to
be wasting
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waste
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 their hours on the roads. The second solution is preferring public transportation
while
 going somewhere
such
 as school or work.
Moreover
, it will reduce the number of cars in certain time periods
then
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 of private cars
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has
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 to be constricted.
To conclude
, I believe that mainly overpopulation and lack of public transport increase the
traffic
 jam but
this
problem
 can be solved by using online websites for needs and decreasing the use of private cars.
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