Many countries are experiencing serious problems with their environment, with pollution of their land, water and air. What are these problems and how might they be reduced?

Nowadays, worldwide it has been accepted that
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the problem of land, water and air pollution is escalating at an alarming rate.
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humanity. There are several reasons for
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government and individuals both collectively should contribute
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the solutions. In my upcoming
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I shall discuss some of the reasons and possible solutions to reduce global contamination. Commencing with the causes which are responsible for the growth of
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, the
first
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revolution. Enormous waste is produced during production,
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a result leading to inorganic bi-product.
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poor disposal
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causing
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impact on
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in form of mixing with air, water supplies and at
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even with the land.
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, dangerous emission of
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vehicles, certain home appliances like
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and
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are directly proportional to
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atmospheric pollution.
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, depletion in the
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to increased permeability to toxic ultraviolet rays from
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Consequently
affecting several health issues
such
as Skin cancer, Dermatitis and lung carcinoma. In order to overcome these problems, there are
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of
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solutions
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can be implemented.
Firstly
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should apply strict laws over
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of industrial and domestic waste and should impose heavy
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along with legal
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, for those who bridge the regulations.
Secondly
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alone cannot be held responsible,
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,famous celebrities should step ahead and help people to educate regarding
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of habitat and mother nature. To cite an example,
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soil drive initiated by
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mystic Sadguru has created a wave of concern amongst the mass.
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but not the least, if every individual promises to serve mankind, a healthy ecosystem can be gifted to our
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offsprings
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drawback of having harm to the living world, leading to
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amount of impurities in
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can be resolved by executing legislation, educational
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programmes
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and much more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystem
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • emissions
  • deforestation
  • conservation
  • biodiversity
  • regulatory standards
  • composting
  • urban sprawl
  • green technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • waste management
  • pollutants
  • non-biodegradable
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