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In order to improve a country's education system, young students should be allowed to openly criticize their teachers during class time. Do you agree with this? Whar are some other ways education systems could be improved?

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Among many ways to strengthen the national education
system
 in INDIA, one thing that a lot of the intellectual thinking is, how about pointing out the issues the
students
 face about their tutors in the classroom itself during teaching hours.
This
 idea may yield many positive results, but at the same time implementing it has many challenges. With
this
 change in the
system
, the
students
 get benefit in bringing the concerns in real-time to the concerned individual directly which saves a lot of time, and sometimes it may help build better understanding between both the parties. In fact, a recent study conducted by "The Ministry of Education, UK" in the northern part of the country, published the results which say the
students
 who are pursuing
this
 style of education are performing exceptionally than schools not allowing open corrections to the teachers. The other possible major advantage is, that there will increase in the percentage of postgraduates.
This
 helps the country in filling the technical gap it currently needs. The base to
this
 point is, my dearest friend who lives in Australia, recently shared many plus points of
this
 sort of
system
 they already been following it more than 5 years. Though I agree to bring
such
 kinds of changes to the
system
, I believe there are some other ways to achieve the same results. One simple strategy that comes to my mind is, to curtain the teacher to
students
 ratio as below as possible. As an example, having one tutor for 5 to 8
students
 will certainly increase the performance of both. In
this
 approach, the teacher will not get stressed as she/he gets ample time to know each student of her.
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