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Some believe social communication has been destroyed by mobile phone technology. Do you agree?

#believe #communication #phone #technology
Today technology changing too much and
social
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the social
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 meeting is reducing because peoples
very
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 busy with
mobile
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a mobile
the mobile
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phone
. I think
phone
using
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 too much
reducing
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reduces
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 family time and
people
 looking
in
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on
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the phone
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phone
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phones
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not
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family
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a family
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member
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members
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. I
am agree
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agree
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 with some
people
believe
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who believe
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 technology
such
 as mobile
phone
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phones
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 and cell
phone
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phones
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 damage social interaction.
First
 of all,
people
using
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use
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 too
much
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many phones
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phone
 because they get
bore
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. I
am think
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 it
give
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gives
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 peoples
chance
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a chance
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for
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to
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use
for
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apply
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many
thing
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things
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 on
phone
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the phone
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 so
people
use
phone
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the phone
a phone
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like
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for
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full
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a full
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 day. One child
use
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uses
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phone
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the phone
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now days
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nowadays
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for
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to
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talk
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talking
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 to friends and
also
use
to
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apply
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for
game
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the game
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.
Next
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 he
use
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for
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 watch
movie
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. Like
this
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 he using
lot
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 of time
in
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on
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phone
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his phone
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 in one day. No control at all.
Second
, I
am think
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think
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 that
phone
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the phone
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 is good enjoyment. All age peoples get enjoyment so they using the mobile
phone
. One man
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who open
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open
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opens
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phone
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his phone
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 can see Facebook all
minute
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minutes
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 changing and like see what
this
friend
 doing or that
friend
 doing or
see
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seeing
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the post
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post
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posts
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.
Also
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seeing
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see
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message
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messages
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 all the time from my what app and
phone
 call to talk
my
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friend
 and family. Too
much
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many
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people
 enjoy on
phone
 so they
use
tiktok
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TikTok
,
instagram
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Instagram
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for
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to
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enjoy
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enjoying
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.
Finally
,
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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phones
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good
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are good
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 and all
persons
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people
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 need
for
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to
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talk
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a talk
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 with
friend
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friends
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 and family
member
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members
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. I think too much
using
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used
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 for enjoyment or because
bore
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the bore
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 is not good. I agree that all
family
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families
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 try to not
use
 too much but
use
 it
correct
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. So all family
member
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members
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happy
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are happy
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 and get
idea
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the idea
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using
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of using
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 the
phone
 correct.
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